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Breaking And Smashing Things

I, Gabriel Penn, have just came off some second draft writing, and it changed everything.

smashing things

I am so excited. After my newest book editing/writing session, I edited about five pages and removed thirteen. Things like this happen in the second draft. It was really just pages of them walking and saying unnecessary things. I could’ve done it better without all the info-dumping. I really have no problems with info-dumping, if done properly; it just made no sense where I did it.

So why the…

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Breaking And Smashing Things

I am so excited. After my newest book editing/writing session, I edited about five pages and removed thirteen. Things like this happen in the second draft. It was really just pages of them walking and saying unnecessary things. I could’ve done it better without all the info-dumping. I really have no problems with info-dumping, if done properly; it just made no sense where I did it.

So why the title? Why are we breaking and smashing things? I think the better question is “what are we breaking and smashing”, rather than “why”, but that’s my own personal opinion. Really, I’m just writing the book that I have been waiting to read. And to do that, we need to break some things.

1. The Fourth Wall
I think we have kept that fourth wall up long enough in our literature. Like, goodness, what do you expect me to yell at, the ceiling? I’m surrounded by walls here. I’m going to break that fourth one a bit. So yeah, I may just start chatting with you in the middle of the novel. That is my version of info-dumping.
(P.S., I do not suggest that everyone start breaking the fourth wall in their novels and have random narrator-to-reader discussions. I have no idea how this is going to work. If it doesn’t, I’ll… probably still do it but I won’t get as much money.)

2. The Rules
I don’t know why we have so many silly rules. No epilogue, no third person omniscient, no important magic, no info dumping, no unsympathetic characters – it’s all just too much. I have an epilogue and it doesn’t even have the same tense style. I have a third person omniscient and I’m going to more than likely keep it that way. I info dump occasionally and I do it with pride. I have a rather unsympathetic antagonist and a bunch of semi-anti-hero protagonists. Magic is not in the background – it’s the plot. I do not like boxes. Or cages. Or barriers. That’s mainly because my power level is secretly over 9000.

C. Expectations
I already mentioned that the main characters are semi-anti-hero. It’s not so much that they don’t care about people. It is that they will do anything to complete their mission. In simple terms, the hero is often just as ruthless as the villain. I do not like writing for boy scouts. I do not have anything against boy scouts, as I have a friend who is one (literally). My beef is with a character who is, in a word, perfect. They do the right thing all the time. They do not ever think that maybe the other side has some good points. They feel like drones. They serve their purpose, but I don’t think I need one for this book.

Also, the elves have guns. Because that’s honestly really cool.

4. Stereotypes
I don’t like them anymore. I tried to stay by them somewhat for a while, just so that the characters seemed somewhat realistic and not too “out there”. But in light of actual realism, I don’t need them at all. I let the characters be whoever they want to be. Most stereotypes are wrong a good portion of the time anyway. Free-range things are tastier anyway. Not that we should eat the characters, but you know what I mean.

5. The Trilogy Cycle
This series is going to be four books. That is all. Trilogies are cool and all, but they are too small. A world should exist in more than three books. Just because Tolkien did it doesn’t necessarily mean you should. Tolkien is pretty awesome, but I don’t think even he would want you to copy everything he does. That, my friend, is called plagiarism, and is frowned upon in most societies.

And that’s really all about it. You probably have lots of questions now. Will Gabriel ever get this book done? Will he eventually stop telling and re-telling us that he’s breaking barriers with this book? Will he someday put out a sneak peak of the book that’s over a paragraph long? Will he finally learn how to properly end a blog post? Is his power level really over nine thousand?! Find out on the next episode of… Dragonball Z!

Wait, that didn’t end right.

On the Prowl Again!

It’s been quite a while since I’ve made a blog, so I figured I should get back into the swing of things and let you all know what’s happening.

Basically, since you’ve been gone I’ve gone to the liberty of editing the book even more-so than it was before! It is now at 399 pages (a travesty for a person with slight OCD, but I have no important things to add and so I will try not worry about it). There’s a lot more character interaction in this version, grittier themes and even more epic fight scenes. Less gore, more grit is how my mind works. Although the old version simply touched on the themes of the destiny, this one also adds the themes of humanity, war, family, morality, and whether or not a person is really inherently good.

Also, since I last posted, the very first hint at character looks is shown in the art for Chapter 4.
I personally love Annika’s work. She’s a champ. I can’t wait to see her continued work, as she plans to do some work for each chapter. Amazing!

Also, because I could, I added some more depth to the hinted love triangle that was already there. I’ve just plain had fun with it, because why shouldn’t I? My favorite part as to now has been the two characters in the book, Luc and Roach. Roach is pronounced Roak, but I didn’t like the “k” look so I switched it to something that I thought looked better. Then I realized what that spelled, and for comedy kept it. As both characters have deep accents, I will admit what they are based on: Scottish. I happen to have a deep love for Scotland, as everyone from my mother’s side is at least part scottish. I’m a fourth-generation American, and one of my oldest family apparently still remembers the boat ride. This boggles my mind, and so in order to make my extended family proud, I put some people in there who sound Scottish. Also, it’s just fun to write for.

However, I am a busy man and just am not in the mood to do a heavily long and detailed speech regarding everything that’s happened, so I will let the work speak for itself. Please observe a certain scene, which I will remove spoilers for and add things to help with context. Also realize that I cannot display some names because I switch constantly between evil and good characters. I don’t want you all to know who goes bad and who doesn’t just yet.

“Whit’s aw thes?” He asked with a drunken slur. He then saw ******* and his eyes widened. “One ‘e you!” he bellowed, grabbing the sword that was resting on his hip and rushing toward *******.
He put his hand out and a blast of air flew towards him. To his surprise, Roach dodged to the left and continued rushing at him. *******’s eyes widened. He continued shooting blasts of air at him as Roach swaggered out of the way drunkenly, hiccupping between dodges occasionally. ******* let out one giant wide-ranged blast [of wind magic], hurling Roach into the house and also knocking the house over.
As the dust cleared, he saw Roach’s brother sat in the rubble next to a table. He took a cup off the table and took a sip. The table and chair he was sitting on crumbled. He looked at ******* angrily as he stood up and took another sip.
“Whit is thes, ye comin’ ower an’ knockin’ mah hoose doon loch ‘at? Bludy rude, e’en fur a monster.” He picked up a sword from the rubble and threw the cup over his shoulder. “Ye need some ‘elp Roach?”
Roach hiccupped. “Ah dornt need yer help, Luc! i’ve got thes! It’s jist one ‘o ‘em!”
Roach’s brother joined Roach and also ran toward *******, but taking a route with the clear intention of coming behind him.

And so, now that that’s all over, I will admit that I am on the prowl for an editor. I don’t know who it will be yet, but as a college kid, it’s hard to find time to do it myself. But I’m happy to have someone else giving it a try, someone a little more professional and who has a fresh look on it.

Adios, my dark friends, keep on following and viewing!